Milk Thistle & Dandelion

Mainlining milk thistle dandelion Zion
Mainlining milk thistle dandelion Zion
Supplementing failing support systems
Supplementing failing support systems
Mainlining Zion, support systems failing
Thistle supplementing dandelion milk

Doubting body’s mechanistic defense
Doubting body’s mechanistic defense
Reevaluating time’s questionable relativity
Reevaluating time’s questionable relativity
Questionable, time’s defense doubting
Reevaluating relativity, body’s mechanistic

Balloon expands to before bursting
Balloon expands to before bursting
To give, how much air is pinched away
To give, how much air is pinched away
How much air, balloon expands to before
Is pinched away, bursting to give

Milk is pinched to give support
Body’s supplementing defense thistle
Systems failing, how questionable time’s
Relativity mainlining mechanistic much
Dandelion bursting before doubting expands
Away balloon air, reevaluating Zion

Posted for dVerse Poets Pub’s FormForAll Paradelles prompt.

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11 thoughts on “Milk Thistle & Dandelion

  1. ha. really like those first two stanzas…it waxes a bit philosophical…and you chose some difficult words and made them work…the systems failing got me humming ground control to major tom… hey i am a sucker for dandelions too so you got me there…not an easy form, def a strong effort sir.

  2. I love the combination of the words “milk thistle dandelion Zion”. They go well together. As Brian notes, you accomplished this form with very difficult language and really made it work. Terrific job!

  3. Strong & creative response to the prompt; which many did not take a shot at; you pulled us off into the abstract poetic ozone, & it sparked lots of line re-readings. Your 4th stanza was strong, & the last 2 lines are killer.

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